Explain Writing- Tautoro School Community

I am learning to use the correct structure and language for Explain Writing.

In our Tautoro School community we have too many kids going on the park.

The park is too small to fit all the kids.

So the facility that is needed by our Tautoro School community is a bigger park.

Why is a bigger park needed by our Tautoro School community?  

First a bigger park is needed so that the kids can have a bigger space to play in.  

Second the kids can have fun on the park and a bigger space for moving around.  

Last they can play with their friend and have a good time with them.  

These are the reasons why a bigger park is needed by our

Tautoro School community.

Isabella